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5 Haiku
Oct 24, 2008 16:24:51 GMT -5
Post by burk28 on Oct 24, 2008 16:24:51 GMT -5
Paint can dripping dust Faded color boredom bred renew this brush please
Tapping window pane Raindrops deaf not listening My brother sun cries
White tablet staring Stark inspiration calling try yellow tablet
Brick bound wall rising Pick in hand surmising this In time weak points crack
Charcoal hair blowing Kindred winds in tune with tree Grass sleeps silently
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5 Haiku
Oct 24, 2008 17:16:56 GMT -5
Post by Antipodi on Oct 24, 2008 17:16:56 GMT -5
GDay this one paints a word picture just like Darli eggcellent write
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5 Haiku
Oct 24, 2008 17:38:19 GMT -5
Post by graesonbelinda on Oct 24, 2008 17:38:19 GMT -5
Very creative write indeed!!! Thanks for sharing.
Belinda
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5 Haiku
Oct 25, 2008 16:35:05 GMT -5
Post by Poetical on Oct 25, 2008 16:35:05 GMT -5
This was very good, though your third line second haiku has 6 syllables and not the 5 that it is supposed to have. you should try you hand at the never ending haiku in the just for fun board.
Paul
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5 Haiku
Oct 27, 2008 15:08:20 GMT -5
Post by burk28 on Oct 27, 2008 15:08:20 GMT -5
Thankyou all for commenting, and thanks for the heads up on ku#2 i made a change to that one. thanks again
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5 Haiku
Dec 21, 2008 9:25:41 GMT -5
Post by londonmoon on Dec 21, 2008 9:25:41 GMT -5
Nice structuring and wording.
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