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Post by Dark is Light on Jan 3, 2008 0:01:03 GMT -5
Which sounds better?
Version One
too transient moon soldier of fading light night's resolved master
as ally, brother champion of child's foe no-face regards all
Version Two
too transient moon soldier of fading light both friend and brother
night's resolved master champion of child's foe no-face regards all
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Post by KmarieB on Jan 5, 2008 13:44:01 GMT -5
Oh I love version two. The line "night's resolved master" so great! I see you have only posted a few... Cannot wait to read more of your work!!
-Kaitlyn
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Post by Dark is Light on Jan 6, 2008 15:22:58 GMT -5
I concur that version two is better. I had thought it was, but I didn't want to scrap the first until I was positive.
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Post by twilightpen on Apr 28, 2008 21:42:39 GMT -5
yes version two is a better tribute to the moon. well written........... twi
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