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Post by slacker (The forgotten Mod) on Dec 21, 2003 10:47:06 GMT -5
Your Eyes Written by: Chris Naylor
I look in your eyes The openings of heaven Take away my pain
Let me Sleep Written by: Chris Naylor
Why won't you let me Sleep and dream away the pain Deprive me of life
Thoughts Transcend Written by: Chris Naylor
My thoughts transcend In a place of peace they rest Above sky and man
Do You Written by: Chris Naylor
Do you feel my pain Or will you answer me this Do you want my love
Let me See Written by: Chris Naylor
Let me see your mind I want to see inside you Let me see your heart
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Post by slacker (The forgotten Mod) on Dec 21, 2003 10:48:34 GMT -5
these were written at 12 in the morning, so if they suck u know y
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Post by VictoriaH (missing him) on Dec 21, 2003 10:49:25 GMT -5
I like the first one best...
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Post by slacker (The forgotten Mod) on Dec 21, 2003 10:57:14 GMT -5
good, if some1 likes them maybe ill pass, lol. i hate writing haikus. it makes my poetry feel so limited
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Post by VictoriaH (missing him) on Dec 21, 2003 19:29:29 GMT -5
Yeah, kinda gotta agree with you there... I'm a very detailed person and three lines just aren't gonna cut it... I got a lot more to say than just about 15 words...
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Post by slacker (The forgotten Mod) on Dec 22, 2003 21:04:07 GMT -5
yeah, i hate having to fit a specific mold when im FREE writing, lol
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Post by VictoriaH (missing him) on Dec 22, 2003 23:43:47 GMT -5
'Zactly.
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Post by beauregard26 on Dec 28, 2003 13:05:57 GMT -5
i just figured it out. the lines have to be a sentence or a sentence fragment but not a continuation of the thought in the last line if you catch my meaning
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Post by slacker (The forgotten Mod) on Dec 28, 2003 20:33:21 GMT -5
nope, not really
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