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Post by Richard on Feb 28, 2004 13:37:27 GMT -5
the pigeon limps his winter hunger almost over
Richard Taylor feb 2004
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Post by Risk on Feb 28, 2004 23:54:56 GMT -5
Well Richard, I really like this just as it is. Unfortunately, it's not a haiku. I don't know if you're familiar with what a syllable is. A syllable is each part of a word that is emphasized. For instance: "syll-a-ble" and "em-pha-sized" are three syllable words. "Each", "Part", "of" and "a" are one syllable words. the pigeon limps his winter hunger almost over the - pig - eon - limps = 4 his - win - ter - hun - ger = 5 al - most - o - ver = 4 You've got a 4/5/4 A haiku uses 5/7/5 Here's a way you could revise this (Although I'd recommend you think of your own words) the gray pigeon limps his winter hunger lingers yet almost over
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Post by Richard on Feb 29, 2004 8:09:25 GMT -5
Risk I do know what a syllable is but thanks for explaining it again- this is a haiku-et not quite correct in the true form, I thought I would put it here as it was published in a haiku magazine a while ago. though I should have marked it as not a true haiku, thanks for keeping me on my toes, perhaps you could comment on some other poems by our members. Richard.
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