April
Absolute Poet
Posts: 56
|
Post by April on Dec 18, 2003 9:11:54 GMT -5
;)Hi,[glow=red,2,300] I am not a native speaker. I happened to find this forum for poetry ,'cause I am lately obsessed by reading and writing poems ,though acturally ,you know,not that confident. Poems published here are superb, by the contrast ,mine are simple also some grammar mistakes. Maybe that does not matter much as long as I do love poem and love the meaning it brings to me! [/glow]
|
|
|
Post by Belinda on Dec 19, 2003 2:20:15 GMT -5
Bravo I understand your frustration But your self talk is very positive and accurate. Just love to write...that's important *Do your poem on a processor first (Word, Works, Office, ect..) By doing a check of it first for grammer, you may be more confident posting it * Don't be discourage by simple...some of the most intense, profound and popular poems are simple "Roses are Red..." * Try new Styles...who knows...maybe you'll find the nitch for you...and you'll love it soo much...you'll have to share it MOST IMPORTANT KEEP WRITING
|
|
April
Absolute Poet
Posts: 56
|
Post by April on Dec 19, 2003 7:17:45 GMT -5
thanks for your encouragement. I'd like to try some new styles, but that is a hard creative job.I've only tried free styles.
Here is one of my poem.
Excuse me
Excuse my whimsy, If I make fuss on your call late. ¡¯Cause to me , that makes a sense.
Excuse my immaturity, If I intend to ignore you when you need me. ¡¯Cause I wanna take revenge, To let you taste this loneliness.
Excuse my tears, If I fail to hide them secretly , Seeping you with the gloom. ¡¯cause , you see, I just miss you too much since you beyond.
Excuse my illed-temper, If I happen to shout out loud toward you on the line. I must be out of my mind. Believe me , I grieve more than you do.
Excuse my selfishness, If I staring into your eyes Yearning for more sparkles. For the more I love you, The more I want the echoes.
Excuse my fragility, If I turn to you with all wounds and hurts. ¡¯Cause you¡¯re the one, As I always think so, That back me up , And the haven I could ask for a escape from cruel realities.
Was I not deserving your excuses? You donot need to answer any more Even not once...
|
|
|
Post by Belinda on Dec 27, 2003 14:28:48 GMT -5
April Other than some grammer, I don't see anything wrong with this...It speeaks from the heart.
Nothing simple here ;D
|
|