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Post by kittycute on May 24, 2007 1:41:49 GMT -5
Wake Up NOW!
bad dreams, so it seems, bad dreams alive, nightmares arrive keep asking why, keep wanting to die, keep up the bitch, never be rich.
focus on loss, livings the cost, focus on pain, wind up insane.
loss of love, blame above, living in hell, will be that spell.
turn the page on all that rage, get over it NOW, living will be-- well--- “WOW.”
kittycute 23 March 007
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Post by graesonbelinda on Jun 4, 2007 11:10:18 GMT -5
I like the short rhyming stanzas. This is the life of a person who is so devastated by something happening in their life. I don't know if this is about you, but always remember this. Life is worth living no matter how bad it gets, you always have worth whether you realize it or not!!!
Belinda
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Post by KmarieB on Jun 5, 2007 18:24:45 GMT -5
i agree with Belinda, the simplicity of the poem really gives it, its beauty! great write!
-Kaitlyn
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Post by kittycute on Jul 4, 2007 2:43:40 GMT -5
thanks Belinda, Kaitlyn and Alice,
for the replies, i do like the short stanza stuff and Alice your insight on the poem is pretty right on.
thanks again,
lv
kittycute
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